20 Simple Wrinkle Erasers

Aging of the skin is a natural process by which the collagen and elastin, that keep our skin looking firm and youthful, begin to decline, this results in wrinkles. Cell production and cell quality also diminish over time resulting in wrinkles. These factors unfortunately are out of our control, though diet and supplements can slow down the process, but it wont stop it.

The influences that are within our control are largely environmental such as pollution (eg; smoking) and sun damage. Here are 20 easy ways to reduce wrinkles and slow down the aging process.

1. Stop smoking (Its #1 for a reason)
2. Always wear sunscreen whether its cloudy or sunny and dont sunbake.
3. Hydrate your skin by drinking about 8 glasses of water a day.
4. Use skin care products that contain antioxidants and AHA’s.
5. Moisturize the skin on your face twice daily.
6. Reduce stress. (Try reading, exercising, meditating) 15 minutes a day is a good start.
7. Reduce alcohol consumption. Over indulging can put enormous strain on your system and will accelerate wrinkles forming.
8. Eat healthily by incorporating plenty of fruits and vegetables in your daily diet.
9. Sleep at least 8 hours every night.
10. Eat fish three times a week. Great for the skin and general health.
11. Check with your doctor about taking supplements, your diet may be lacking some of the important ones.
12. Use an eye cream for the delicate skin around the eyes nightly.
13. Facial scrubs remove the build up of dead cells that can increase the appearance of wrinkles, try this weekly.
14. Use natural skin care products that will nourish your skin and give it lots of vitamins and minerals to help it stay fresh and healthy.
15. Jojoba oil resembles the skins natural oils. Dab this around the eyes to keep wrinkles at bay.
16. Take vitamin C supplements and use products that contain vitamin C, it will help boost your collagen.
17. Start a good skin care routine in your 20s. Prevention is easier than the cure.
18. Honey is known worldwide for its beneficial abilities. Use a honey mask weekly. Simply apply the honey to your face and neck and leave for 30 minutes then rinse off. This mask will “feed” your skin with nutrients.
19. Aloe Vera and Avocado oil both have the ability to prevent the skin from drying out; they are both used to improve the skins elasticity.
20. A soothing way to help achieve a wrinkle-free face is to lie on your back with your knees elevated by placing a pillow or cushion beneath them.

Try this when you are watching TV or reading.

About the Author:

The Author is the founder of LanaB Skin Care. She produces a monthly newsletter pertaining to the industry and has over twenty years experience producing skin care products. Find more info at http://www.lanab.com.au

Source: http://www.articlesnatch.com/Article/20-Simple-Wrinkle-Erasers/251445

Frequently Asked Questions

  1. QUESTION:
    How does this sound for the beginning of my story?
    It all started on a bright Friday morning. There was no school so I was off to spend most of my day at the herb shop with Blithe Willows, the owner. She was also one of my closest friends and and a fellow witch. In a small town like Berkeley most everything is in walking distance which is why at 17 I still hadn’t found a reason to get a license. I was completely content to stay in the town forever. Blithe’s shop was right around the corner from my house so I saw the side first. It was faded brick a very light red as are most of the buildings in this town. The front was mostly a window with potted plants both hanging on a rack and sitting on a bench. I knew the inside by heart. The front room was fairly small with cluttered shelves filled with pots and racks with drying plants hung on them. It was hardly ever busy. Most of the time there were just women looking for fresh herbs for cooking. I pulled open the glass door and the little bells chimed. Blithe came rushing in, her graying hair coming out of the tie and falling in her face, as usual but she smiled when she saw me. For a woman in her late fifties she looked good. Not too many wrinkles and very lively. She had pale skin and blue-black eyes.
    “Oh, honey, it’s good to see you! It’s been a very busy morning and I could use some help.”
    “Sure. I’d love to. Whatcha need?” I asked with a tilt of my head. I heard rustling in the back room then three teens, one girl and two boys, appeared. The guys looked like brothers and all three looked about my age. One guy was tall with a lot of muscles, while the other was average height, slim and had a cute smile. They both had brown hair- the taller one’s slightly darker- and blue eyes. The girl had fiery red hair with black eyes. She looked like a witch.

    Also I need help naming the taller guy. Here’s the link. http://uk.answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=AhYEcE_VBgsLpGSK1xnEor8hBgx.;_ylv=3?qid=20100515194644AAD6w7H
    I realize it’s kind of… jumpy. But this is only the first little bit. And my main character, Cat, is a little… scatter-brained? She has trouble really focusing on one thing. Which comes into play a lot in the rest of the story.

    • ANSWER:
      Brianna has spoken a bunch of mumbo jumbo if you ask me. This is a great start. I love it already. It’s not rushed at all. Don’t listen to her.

  2. QUESTION:
    Do you think this sounds like a good home made cleanser?
    I want to make a home made cleanser because store bought producuts can have harsh chemicals..
    I’m going to make a cleanser with honey, rose water, mint water, and vegetable glycerin.
    honey helps with acne, it makes your skin smooth, prevents wrinkles, pretty much everything.. rose water smells good and it helps with acne, mint helps with acne too and it cleans really good, and vegetable glycerin will make the product last longer
    does this sound good? I don’t know how much honey/rose water/mint water to use though
    Both nice answers thank you!

    • ANSWER:
      That sounds pretty good. It’s pretty much a mix of all the good DIY skin ingredients.
      I think less honey since it’s thick, and more rose water and mint water.

  3. QUESTION:
    I have an idea, teen health?
    I’ve tried exersicing until I pass out, running on 800 calories a day, alli pills, fasting, and all of the above combined. No fat loss! i actually gained a few :(. I’ve tried clearasil, acnefree, clean & clear, cetaphil (worked okay 🙂 ), neutrogena, and MINOCYCLINE! I still have acne. I’m not fat, and I don’t have extreme severe ance. But I don’t have a flat tummy, or a clear face. Well yes, I have to exercise no matter what to lose weight, and I will always have to wash my face…. but it would be a lot easier to deal with both of these problems at once, right? Both of these problems are linked to nutrition and hormones. Over this past year, I’ve collected a bunch of information and tips. Acai berry vitamins, fish oils, multivitamins for teens, and WATER, oh and being cold! Weird huh? Well I think it’s worth a shot right? This will take a week… and being inpatient hasn’t worked for me for two years! So here’s my plan!

    Rules:
    1. Drink a minimum of 60 oz. of water per day!
    2. Exersice at least 45 mins a night (just walking around the mall counts!) to speed up your metabolism. Everyday of the week, we’re kids, that’s what we should do anyway!
    3. Fast-Food = Fast calories, and zits… look up how many calories & and fat are in a big mac, you’ll see what I mean! So choose something on the menu that isn’t greasy or fried.
    4. No soda, sorry… but It’s horrible for you. drink 100% juice instead if you’re craving a sweet drink, that way you settle your craving, and get a full serving of fruit! Besides, pop was proven to actually make you thirstier!
    5. Use the food pyramid to plan your meals, it’s the only thing that works really!
    6. Junk food is Okay!(not really a rule but..)… IN MODERATION. 200 calories of cheetos a day is fine!
    7. Don’t take pills for acne or weight loss, because weight loss pills can make you breakout, and acne pills can cause weight gain, and both can cause depression!
    8. Natural is always best. Choose carrots over chips, and choose a honey/ oatmeal mask over benzoyl peroxide (GAVE ME TEMPERARY WRINKLES).
    9. Be happy. If you’re feeling sorry for yourself and being sad sitting on the couch hating life, why don’t you get up and dance? It send endorphines to your brain(makes you feel great!), and burns calories! WOW!
    10. Don’t do it in vane, do it for health!

    IMPORTANT MUSTS:
    1. Fish oils, omega 3,6,9!
    2. Multi vitamin, (teen ones).
    3. Wash face with mild soap twice daily (such as cetaphil).
    4. Moisturize! Believe it or not moisturizing actually helps get rid of acne! (oil-free moisturized, again I suggest ctaphil products!)
    5. Never eats UNDER 1500 calories a day…. starving actually leads to weight gain, weird right?
    6. Get a buddy, someone to talk to about exersices and acne progress, and just for motivation!
    7. Never skip out on fruits and veggies and whole grains! =]
    8. Fiber tablets are great, there flavored and chewable, and help your body with digestion and much more!
    GOOD LUCK!!! =]
    OOPS I didn’t realize I put it in pregnancy and parenting…. I’m fourteen not a parent. =]
    This isn’t really a question, I just could never find anything on YA, so I decided to put everything I’ve learned together for all my fellow teens.
    Any questions, or concerns email me!
    alexbooth21@yahoo.com
    I want to help=]

    • ANSWER:
      try proactive, it works great

  4. QUESTION:
    HELP ME PLEASE DO YOU GUYS LIKE THIS?
    Once upon a time there was a family of 3, son mom,and dad,
    One day, the son was taking a shower with his dad naked then he ask his dad “How much is that hanging long black thing with those two balls? papa” Then his papa replied ,”It’s 3 dollars”
    Next day, The son took a shower with his mama naked then the son ask his ma : How much is that black thing with that funny wrinkles?” Mama replied,”It’s 5 dollars honey!”
    After that the sit together and eat.. then the son suddenly said “Dad’s black thing is so much cheaper than mama’s. I like dad’s better because i can hold it”

    • ANSWER:
      WTF?? lol

      It sounds like you like it.

  5. QUESTION:
    PLEASE HELP ME WITH MY SKIN!!!!! 16 yearsold.?
    under eye wrinkles!!! they just suddenely APPEARED!!!!! now under my eyes they are really bad!!! they look so gross. please help!!! I god vitamin e oil, olive oil, the olay eye lifting serum, and im putting honey on my face every day. i drink TONS of water, eat SUPER healthy, drink green tea every day, get like 9-10 hours of sleep, and put on SPF 70 EVERY MORNING!!! WHY IS THIS HAPPENING TO ME!!!!! what should i do? they seriously are REALLY noticeable. They like fan out to my cheekbones. I don’t want you to just say, o, don’t worry about it, you’re 16. because that SO doesn’t help THANKS SO MUCH FOR ANY SUGGESTIONS!!!!!!! 🙂

    i laugh a lot. im a happy person lol. um, they’re def not from stress cuz im like the leasy stressed out person in the WORLD. well, kind of. heehee. a week ago i did have this sleep problem and i didn’t sleep for three days straight. maybe that’s it… and i just got my period. will they go away? are they just something from hormones??? HELP!!!
    I already tried an egg white mask. it didn’t work. i just feel like my skin is really ugly. suggestions would be wonderful.
    heres a pic:
    http://www.flickr.com/photos/36178021@N0…
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    13 minutes ago – 4 days left to answer.
    Additional Details
    can u tell me how bad they are? like for a 16 year old? and my skin?
    8 minutes ago

    my skin is also like saggy, can’t u tell? it’s not like a normal 16 year olds. ADVICE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i use TONS OF moisturizer (the teens turning green line)
    SORRY!!!!!!!!! LINKS:
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    • ANSWER:
      Posting this everywhere is not going to help. Just try to get even more sleep than you already do and maybe get an anti-aging moisturizer. (Teens Turning Green might not be best for under eye wrinkles.)

  6. QUESTION:
    HOW TO CURE FACE IRRITATION AFTER USING MAC CONCEALER?!?
    So for my birthday i bought mac concealer, and my mirror shows all the lines and wrinkles on my face and i exaggerated a little bit and put it around my mouth area to cover the shadows where you smile, and i noticed about 4 days later in the mirror, small bumps EVERYWHERE on the sides of my mouth started to appear, (on my lower cheeks, near my jaw line) so i used more of the concealer to cover the bumps and i use to have perfect skin ! and its been non stop bumps and pimples filled with pus ! what do i dooo? what can i use to clear my facee? ive been on clean and clear, oxy, clinique and clinique has been the only things thats been clearing up are little pimples and black heads on my forehead, not the pimples or irritation on the sides of my mouth ! school starts in a month and a half and ive been in my house for 3 weeks ? what do i doo, what do i usee !?HELP !

    btw ive been using aloe vera every morning and honey and lemon mixed together and then clean my face w. the clinique(3 step acne solution) after later in the day and its been about 4 days and it looks the same.

    • ANSWER:
      If something makes your skin break out, don’t use more of it next time.

      IDK what will help your skin, but more of the MAC concealer definitely will not help. Try to return the MAC concealer. Bring your receipt and the product and tell the counter salesperson that this concealer made your skin break out and you would like your money back. If it’s too late for a refund, tell them you’d like credit. Use the credit to buy something else like a lipstick. I’ve only used MAC lipsticks. I stick with Clinique makeup.

  7. QUESTION:
    How do the Abkhasians regard work?
    How do the Abkhasians regard work?
    Please read the following and help me i didnt get any of it.:

    It is not unusual for the people of the Caucasus region of the former Soviet Union to live well into their 90s and 100s. Estimates suggest that almost 3 percent of the population of the Caucasus is over 90 years of age. In contrast, people over 90 in the United States represent only 0.4 percent of the population. Not only do Caucasians live to a very old age, their physical and mental faculties remain remarkably intact. These people show the signs of aging—their hair is gray or white, and their skin in wrinkled—but they have good eyesight, excellent hearing, and unusually erect posture.
    Intrigued by the question of why the Caucasians live such long and healthy lives, American anthropologist Sula Benet undertook a study of the elderly people of Abkhasia. Abkhasia is a former Soviet republic bordered on the west by the Black Sea and on the east by the Caucasus Mountains. Benet’s findings led her to suggest that the stability and continuity of the Abkhasians’ culture is the major factor responsible for the Caucasians’ long life expectancies. Below is a summary of her findings.
    Benet found that the Abkhasians regard work as an activity vital to life and that the concept of retirement is completely foreign to them. From their early years to their old age, they work as hard as their ability and physical conditions allow. Obviously, as they grow older the amount of work they can do decreases. Even so, people in their 100s continue to work, often as much as four hours a day.
    The Abkhasians also find time for exercise. An Abkhasian saying states that “it is better to move without purpose than to sit still.” Consequently, Abkhasians usually begin each day by taking a long walk. They believe that these work and exercise habits greatly contribute to their long lives. Their doctors tend to agree with the Abkhasians, suggesting that the Abkhasians’ slow, steady approach to work and their dedication to exercise help their bodies to operate more efficiently.
    The Abkhasians believe that their diet also is a factor in their long lives. They never overeat, and they consider overweight people to be ill. When eating, they cut their food into small bites, which they chew very slowly. This habit greatly helps their digestion. Also, the type of food the Abkhasians eat varies little throughout their lives. They consume little meat and practically no fish. Most of their protein comes from goat cheese and buttermilk. They never use sugar, although they do use honey as a sweetener. The bulk of their diet comes in the form of fresh fruits and vegetables and a bread substitute called abista.
    Few Abkhasians smoke, and they do not drink tea or coffee. The only stimulant the Abkhasians use is a locally-produced red wine, which is low in alcoholic content. This wine is consumed usually in moderate amounts, at the midday and evening meals. Doctors interviewed by Benet believe strongly that the Abkhasians’ sensible diet and lack of “bad habits” add years to their lives.
    Benet acknowledges that work, exercise, and diet all contribute to the Abkhasians’ long life span. She argues, however that the Abkhasians’ attitude toward aging is of equal importance. Benet notes that the Abkhasians’ language contains no words that are equivalent to the English words retired, senior citizen, or old people. Rather, Abkhasians over the age of 100 are called long-living people. Also, death for the Abkhasians is not the logical end to life’s journey, but rather, something irrational. When death finally does come, the Abkhasians show their grief openly, often uncontrollably.
    Further, Benet suggests, the structure of Abkhasian society and the role of the elderly in it also contribute to long lives. Abkhasian society is based on a complex kinship system. This system is so extensive that everyone with the same surname is considered kin. Such interdependence is the basis of the strong sense of security and belonging that most Abkhasians—both young and old—possess. This sense of security and belonging is strengthened for older Abkhasian by the respect they receive. They are asked to lead major ceremonies and celebrations, are called on to settle disputes, and are consulted on all matters of importance.
    In short, Benet found that the elderly of Abkhasia are life-loving, balanced people who believe that they are an important part of society. This, she notes, is in stark contrast to many older Americans who believe that they are burdens to themselves and to their families. Could such people—and all Americans—learn something from the Abkhasians? According to Benet, the answer is yes.
    1)How do the Abkhasians regard work?
    2)How does the way the older Abkhasians regard themselves compare to the way many older Americans are portrayed in the mass media?
    PLEASE HELP SOON!

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  8. QUESTION:
    Ethnicity help??????????????????????????????
    my grandma was adopted

    we don’t know what ethnicity she is. she don’t know either..

    she’s dark skinned but not like mexican or african amercicans or south american… herr skin tone is like furgie sorta. she has black hair. she looks like an american woman though. well when she was young she did. now she looks like a from another place, i guess the wrinkles helped her look differen’t..

    well yeah. her skin tone is sorta like furgie, har for me to discern really. she looks 4% more darker than furgie though. she’s a little darker i think. but then.. i havn’t seen furgie in person so i can’t say and last time i seen my grandma she looked light skin. but that was in 06. i have her younger pictures with me and she’s not white. she’s not white sknned like white people, she has black hair. her eyes are either brown, light brown, or honey or hazel.. i seen her in 06 she lives in florida, and i live in california.. i hardley know her though.. in younger younger pictures her hair is up.. like i love lucy style sorta… don’t know if that’s her style cause she’s in america, or that’s how her parents raised her…!!! or she had short hair don’t know,

    SHe thinks her adopted parents were italian. i’m now sure if she knows her adopted parents were italian, but she just doesn’t know what she is. she’s not sure if she’s italian or not.. my mom thinks she might have some spanish in her or is spanish!!! she looks like an american woman though really.. i have looked and looked i only came up with italian, french or some kind of europeaon or spain.. i believe shw was raised in america. My mom was raised in america. florida/orgen/california

    • ANSWER:

  9. QUESTION:
    can someone tell me if the first chapter of my book is ok?
    hey, i need some help. im 14 and this is my first novel. so far i have done 35 pages of it, but im not sure how it sounds from someone elses oppinion. if you could give me your thoughts, it would be much appreciated. this is the first chapter, it looks long, but it really isnt that bad. (please excuse my spelling in it, i havent got around to proof reading.) thanks again.

    Chapter 1
    To Taylor

    I don’t know what I expected out of life. Growing up in the country, i got used to the simple life, knowing that my life could be worse and most likely wouldn’t get better. Since my mother died when i was ten, five years ago after getting thrown of her horse, I lived only with my dad. Together we ran herds of cows and sheep over our land. It was the simple life, the quiet, serene life, the life for me. Every morning my dad and I woke up at six thirty sharp to move the herds of cattle, grow crops and did repairs on our old farmyard, not being able to go to bed until late. Not the life for a kid, I know, but all that mattered to me was I was with my dad and together we lived away from the troubles and dangers of the world. Until I met Taylor, and then everything, my life, my future and my way of thinking changed forever.

    “Kate? Honey?”My dads voice rang out from outside into the cottage. I lay down the dishes I was washing, brushed my hands on my apron and walked to the back door. Peering through the gaps, i could see dad talking to someone outside. I didn’t know who it was, but he sure looked important. My guess was that he would be in his late fifties, early sixties. His age wasn’t that difficult to guess, considering his thin grey hair and his badly wrinkled face. But it wasn’t the face that necessarily caught my eye, but what he wore. Naturally in the country, you wore jeans, a shirt and a wide brim hat to avoid sunburn, but there that man was standing in an expensive designer suit. Cuffs, spotless shirt and coat and even his shoes had no dust on them, which was highly unusual considering the only roads and paths around here were gravel and dirt. Not sure what to expect, I took a deep breath and pushed open the door.

    Dust flew into the air behind me as I made my way from the house to where my dad and Mr Mystery stood at the end of the drive. When I reached them, they were deep in conversation. Behind them, a big, black land Cruiser stood idle. Who ever this man was, he meant business. Big, expensive business.
    “Ah Kate,” my dad exclaimed” wrapping his arms around my shoulders, “meet Mr Andrews.
    “Hello Miss White.”Mr Andrews said. “Hey,” I greeted softly. Although I knew it was impolite not to look at someone when they were talking to you, I couldn’t force my eyes to look into his piercing blue eyes.
    “Mr Andrews is here for a business proposition.” My dad exclaimed. Although a business proposition was nothing really to be proud of, my father beamed like he was told he just won the lottery.
    “Yes?” I asked curious.
    My dad looked at Mr Andrews, expecting him to answer.
    “Well little lady, Kate isn’t?” I nodded. “ I’m not sure how much you and your dad know, but the stock market is expanding, and the only way to keep ahead is to stay rich.”
    “Stock market?” i turned to ask dad, confused by the odd term.
    “ Basically the flow of money in the economy.” Although he answered, he also sounded confused by the odd term. Big corporate words didn’t go down too smoothly this far away from major cities.
    “yes,” mr Andrews continued, “ and me and my company think that there is an awful lot of money to be made from your property.” He turned and faced towards our hills and stretched out his arms, as if he was embracing the quiet countryside. “its size, quantity and quality of the soil and conditions are perfect for growing our produce.” He lowered his arms and sighed.
    “If you don’t mind my asking sir, but what exactly do you grow?” curiosity got the best of me.
    “”Potatoes.” he replied looking at me, a proud beam on his wrinkled face.
    “Potatoes?” money in potatoes? It sounded like as realistic as pigs flying.
    “Yes, my company grows the best potatoes in the country then we turn them into the countries best chips: Crispy Andrews. Have you heard of them?”
    I shook my head. He looked surprised, very surprised.
    “Here, try some.” And he pulled a small packet out of one of his expensive pockets. The packaging looked familiar, but I definitely hadn’t eaten them before. I reached out and grabbed the pack. “Roasted Tomato and Basil Flavour”. Unusual. I needed both my hands to open the pack, and i squirmed out of dads half embrace. The smell reached me the second I opened the pack. Salt, tomato, basil, herbs and the faint hint of oil overwhelmed my senses. I pulled out a chip, looked at dads’ and Mr Andrews expecting faces and bit down. The chip was like nothing i ever tasted. No king had ever eated a chip like this. I was unlike anything else the world had ever seen, and by that i mean it was disgusting. As i forced myself t

    • ANSWER:
      It cut off by the way…..
      But from what I read it is a really good start, but I have to point a few things out as constructive criticism. The second sentence has like 4 comma’s there are a few places that just run on and on and it is hard to keep up with. The part where you mention the mom died is very rushed and there is only a few words really telling about that. So that would be my first Comment, be careful of your commas! Next, try to instead of just saying “not being able to go to bed until late” could be turned into something a little more..descriptive. We would finally go to bed when our eyelids drooped and we could no longer stand to keep them open. Or something more descriptive. The same thing with the morning and so on. You have a REALLY good base to work of off. Keep writing and don’t give up!

  10. QUESTION:
    How can I start my chapter off with a bang?
    I know it’s a short chapter. I’m making short chapters.

    The walls were a calming neutral tone. A nurse, around twenty-five, wearing a uniform as dull as the walls, led me down the narrow hallway. The name plates outside each door leapt out at me, the only colors I could see.

    “What’s your name, honey?” The nurse asked as she helped me out of my wrinkled, blood-stained clothing. I couldn’t remember how they had gotten into that state.

    “Madison Porter,” I whispered as I slipped on the hospital gown.

    “Maddy—”

    “Don’t call me Maddy!” My body was shaking. The football players had called me Maddy at the party.

    The nurse held her hands up calmly, as if I would attack her. “I’m sorry Madison.”

    I looked down at the cold tiled floor. “I’m sorry.”

    “Madison, sweetheart, do you know why you’re here?”

    I looked up at her. “Did I hurt someone?”

    “Yes, you did.”

    “Who did I hurt?”

    She looked gently at me and pulled back the plain white covers of the single bed. “Your therapist will tell you all of that tomorrow. For now, I want you to get some sleep.”
    I nodded and climbed into bed. The nurse hadn’t even left the room before I was asleep.
    She’s in a mental hospital.
    She isn’t bleeding, she attacked someone.
    The nurse is trying to make conversation.

    • ANSWER:
      A better start to this section, in my opinion, would be:

      The nurse helped me out of my wrinkled, blood-stained clothing.

      That’s something that’s….shocking, I guess, and evokes, for me, questions. Why is she in hospital? If she’s in hospital, then why hadn’t they changed her and wrapped up whichever part of her was bleeding?

      Surely the nurse would know the name of her patient?

      But I like it so far. All the commas and full stops in the right places, and it has a nice flow to it.

      This is only a small section, if I liked it, which I do, I would obviously read on and find out myself that she was bleeding because she attacked someone and that she is in a mental hospital. It’s good that I didn’t know this straight away, since suspense is good and having the reader ask questions inside their head about “what’s going on” helps them to read on and get hooked into the story.

  11. QUESTION:
    Um… Can I have help editing this? And maybe have help with making it longer?
    PS: Lucy is an alien

    Joe had made a mistake. He should have never let Lucy drive his baby. She was way too young to drive anyway. It had been a terrible, terrible mistake. Yet… when he had looked into those big green eyes that sparkled like emeralds, he couldn’t help but say yes. In spite of everything, those eyes had made him think; ‘what was the worst that could happen’?

    The answer was simple. This was the worst that could happen. Lucy hadn’t been paying much attention to the road and everything had gone too fast, it had all been a blur. The honking of a horn, the blinding lights, and the rush of off road driving. And now this. One side of the car was completely smashed against an old brick building that looked as if it was ready to cave in. And… the alarm had gone off.

    Lucy, luckily, had emerged from the wreckage all right. She was a little scraped up and her outfit was disheveled and singed in certain places — not to mention the flaming red mess that was her hair — but physically, she was fine. Upset and confused, but fine.

    An adolescent boy with black hair and an unbelievable amount of acne walked past her, snickering. “Nice car,” he sneered.

    “Thank you so very much,” Lucy gushed. The boy just rolled his eyes and walked faster. The young alien then walked to the curb. “Excuse me please?” she asked just about each person that walked past. Some of them went away at a very swift speed — probably thinking that she was on some kind of drug. Some of them rejected her much more cruelly than that. A few girls even flipped her off, a gesture that she was rather unfamiliar with.
    And yet, despite the rudeness of the inner city public she wasn’t bothered by their behavior. In fact, the first thing that truly troubled her was the well dressed, extremely attractive young man. He had been watching her for a great deal of time before he sauntered up to her.

    “Hello,” he said in a low, unbelievably tantalizing voice.

    Lucy’s face lit up when he said that and she replied, “Hello.”

    “So sweetheart,” the man purred, flashing her a smile “You seem lost. Would you like some help?”

    Lucy only mildly wondered why this person was calling her internal organs sweet. “Are your aware of how to fix the car which I have broken?”

    He chuckled at this, “You know, you’re pretty hot”

    “I am most surely not. It is very cold out here”

    Suddenly, and without warning things took a turn for the worse. The man took a quick step closer, “Stupid, but I like that. You’ll do just fine hon’” he said, voice still sweet as honey as he grabbed her wrist.

    “I do not know what I will do, but I greatly advise that you let go of me or I shall cause you great pain!”

    He chuckles again and tightens his grip, “Feisty are we?”

    She glared at him, her eyes glowing green “I requested that you let go of me,” she said angrily

    The smile melted from his face and he loosened his grip, but didn’t let go.

    A green blast came from her eyes and he fell to the ground. Lucy’s eyes went back to normal … well not normal, but they did stop glowing. Instead they grew big and filled with tears.

    They almost stopped however, when she saw a middle aged man walked toward her. The man, who was of small stature and thin build, rattled his way past however. His leathery, wrinkled skin matched his worn out clothing. He grinned at the alien as he walked by, revealing his yellow rotten teeth.

    She became apprehensive at the sight of him. He was quite different from most earth people that she had seen.

    Almost tripping over the body on the ground, the man cursed and turned around. “What the hell?” He asked Lucy gruffly.

    After a moment she opened her mouth. “He would not let go of me” she said defiantly bracing her jaw.

    “Damn bastard” he muttered under his breath then changed his attention to the wreckage behind them, “That yours?”

    “No, but my friend was most generous to let me have it temporarily”

    “Idiot” he muttered under his breath, obviously referring to said ‘friend’. The truth is he contemplated calling the police several times by that point, but thought better of it. He sighed as if deciding something that cost him a great deal of pain. “Wanna go get this thing fixed?”

    Lucy smiled widely, “That would be so very appreciated”

    “C’mon then.” He started walking away, his gait oddly proud; despite the fact that he was acting like helping her pained him. “The mechanic is gonna be pissed”

    • ANSWER:
      You need to take nearly half of your writing out. You keep explaining what is happening. Instead of saying she’s an alien, have her doing things that show it,without actually telling the reader.

      How does the person telling the story meet Lucy? Why does he suspect Lucy is an alien? Why does Lucy want to drive the car? Answer those questions in the story and it will be longer.

      Remember in English class when you write essays, the teacher is looking for examples. A story is not an essay, but the same principle applies. The reader doesn’t want to read a list, but to transported someone else.

  12. QUESTION:
    I don’t know my writing style?
    I have to write an essay analyzing a short story I wrote. One of the paragraphs is on my own writing style. Thing is, I have no idea what my writing style is, how to describe it, I’m completely at a loss. Here is a small portion of my short story. Can you help me?

    They see perfection. They see a girl with honey blonde hair that is always pulled back in a ponytail, hair that never falls out of place. They see a girl with a pale complexion untouched by blemishes. They see ocean blue eyes and full pink lips. Everything they see is beautiful, but they don’t know the truth. They don’t hear the voices.
    “What’s with you?” Elise asked, snapping me back to reality.
    My brow furrowed slightly, “What do you mean?”
    “What I mean is you are always drifting off! And sometimes I see you mumble to yourself, it freaks me out,” her nose wrinkled.
    “I get lost in thought,” I shrugged.
    She thinks you’re crazy. Ha! Are you crazy? Of course you are! The voices taunted. My hands flickered to my temples. Normally they rambled, speaking of random things that I found easy to ignore. However, today they seemed organized and I didn’t like their tone.
    “Well stop it, you need to focus and help me draw this stupid plant before art next period,” she frowned at the flowers sitting between us. She didn’t understand my fascination and adoration for Deadly Nightshade; she didn’t see the poetic beauty of it. Elise saw it as a plant, I saw it as wonder. The fact that something so dangerous could be masked with such beauty was enticing.
    “Stupid plant,” she muttered.
    Oh, she isn’t happy now is she? You should silence that mouth of hers.

    • ANSWER:
      Everything determines your writing style, from diction to sentence structuring. I’ll quickly summarize your style for you.

      1) You use loose sentences that first state the primary point of the sentence and then modifies it with a related preposition afterward. Example: “They see perfection…” then you describe what is perfection to them with “..a pale complexion untouched by blemishes.”

      or

      “She didn’t understand my fascination and adoration for Deadly Nightshade…” (the main point of the sentence), “…she didn’t see the poetic beauty.” (modification of the main point to describe the fascination).

      2) Also, your diction is mostly literal as opposed to metaphorical. You also focus on direct/physical/concrete imagery over abstract imagery. Example: “The voices taunted..” “My hands flickered..” “..they rambled..” “She should silence that mouth of hers.” etc.

      You’re being literal with everything you say. The physical/concrete images you show reinforce this literal diction. If you were speaking metaphorically..your diction would be more abstract.

      3) Your sentence structuring is simple, direct, and straight-forward. You don’t apply many compound sentences, you don’t use many conjunctions, your punctuation is standard format..you aren’t pushing the norms with it to make a statement or show accents or dialect changes.

      4) You are writing linearly so your story’s formatting is also standard. This could be due to the genre you’re writing (since some genres..like children’s literature or romance require linearly told story structures), but it’s your style as well.

      5) You use dialogue to develop your characters over prose. So dialogue serves as a character development device for you. That is your style.

      6) Your description and details are limited and very basic. You aren’t one to expound on unnecessary things, info. dump, or decorate your writing with purple, flowery language. You seem, actually, to leave a lot of description out. So if this is intentional then you may like to use the reader’s imagination as a tool, otherwise, you’re style spreads your story telling to a bare-minimum and focuses mostly on actions and dialogue over descriptive text/prose/exposition.

      7) Your pacing is quick..which is reinforced by the snappy, short, to-the-point sentences. This is also reinforced by your lack of description. You’d be good at writing flash fiction or short stories because you seem to write with an economy of words.

      8) Finally, you don’t use many literary devices to express yourself and the character development is minimal. There aren’t many foreshadowing events, red herrings, monologue, flashbacks, similes/metaphors, personification..etc…used in your style. Again, you are very straight-forward and aren’t one to suggest or infer in your writing. What you see is basically what you get.

      I hope this helped you identify your writing style. Good luck 🙂

  13. QUESTION:
    Novel Help…? Please answer.?
    I need some help with my novel. I have just finished the 7th chapter and now i dont know how to start the next chapter. i know what want to happen but i just dont know how to start it or how im going to explain whats happening.
    So i need some help
    Here is chapter 7:
    Chapter 7
    Close Call

    By the time I was out of breath I had made it into town. I had been running for what seemed like an hour but was more likely only a few minutes. It was five am so it would be getting light soon so I had to get inside somewhere. I looked around I saw a bakery (that of course wasn’t open) and a clothes shop (which also wasn’t open). I walked up to the bakery and there was a sign on the door that said: The bakery will be opening at six thirty. I didn’t have that long. I looked at my watch, five thirty. I only had half an hour it till it would be light. Already it was starting to get light. I started to panic. Where am I going to go? I thought. I looked around again and I saw it. I saw an empty (well nearly except for a few tables) space next to the bakery that had a roof on top of it. I ran over there and sat down on one of the tables. The sunlight came at twenty past six. I hid next to the wall of the bakery to make sure that no sun would hit me. Above the sidewalk in front of the bakery was a roof that no sun was there at all. I quickly ran over there hoping that no sun would hit me. Luckily for me no sun hit me. My watch said it was thirty-five past six and it was right. The bakery was starting to open. When I was sure that the bakery was open I opened the door and walked in. Ladies that worked there looked at me and smiled and I smiled back. There were a couple of older men that were drinking coffee at tables. I sat down at a table at the far wall of the bakery just to be sure that I wouldn’t get hit by any sun. A waitress came up to me with a menu and smiled.
    “Hello.” The waitress said. “I’m Tracey.”
    “Hello.” I smiled.
    “Here’s your menu.” She handed me the menu. Tracey stood there while I pretended to look at the menu. What am I going to do? I thought. I can’t ask her if she can get me a glass of blood.
    “So is there anything you would like?” Tracey said after a few minutes. I wrinkled my face.
    “No. Sorry. It’s not what you have on the menu it’s just that I’m a very fussy eater.” I said. “And drinker.” I added.
    “Oh. That’s alright honey.”
    “Connie.”
    “Sorry what was that?”
    “My name is Connie.”
    “Oh. Well that’s alright Connie.” I smiled and Tracey walked away.
    The lunch hour. It was the worst. By lunch I was still in the bakery. I couldn’t leave until it was dark out and it was still quite sunny. Every so often Tracey and all the other waitresses would stare at me. They were probably thinking: Why is that kid still here? Every time they stared at me I just smiled and acted like everything was normal. By four pm the sun had gone down so it was safe to leave. I walked out of the bakery and down the street. Everyone that was walking down the street stared at me like the waitress in the bakery. They were probably thinking the same thing. I smiled at them as I walked pasted.
    It was six pm. I was still walking down the street. I felt thirsty and I remembered that I forgot to put some blood bags in my backpack. What am I going to do? I thought. I need blood to survive. If I don’t get blood in me soon I will not survive. I thought about my options for a minute. 1) I could go back to Shiloh’s house and get some blood bags. 2) I could go to the hospital and get more blood bags. Or 3) I could drink someone’s blood. I sure as hell wasn’t going back to Shiloh’s house, even for blood. I couldn’t go to the hospital because I only just moved to Shiloh’s and I had heaps of blood then. So that only leaved drinking someone’s blood.

    Now how should i start the next part. it is when she is going to be drinking someones blood and i dont know whos.

    Thanks in advance! :]
    Please do not say something like “im sick of vampire stories write about something else” I am not writing a vampire story becasue of twilight, okay? twilight was okay but not the best book ever, and i have been a fan of vampire books way before twilight was even writen. so please dont say that i am only writing a vampire story because of twilight.

    • ANSWER:
      This is wretched.

      For example: “make sure that *no sun would hit me*. Above the sidewalk in front of the bakery was a roof that no sun was there at all. I quickly ran over there hoping that *no sun would hit me*. Luckily for me *no sun hit me*.”

      Brackets are a bad idea unless you use them properly. Numbering options is sloppy looking too.

      There’s spelling mistakes (leaved in stead of left, pasted instead of past, etc)

      Why did it take the narrator 30 minutes to look at the bakery? “It was five am so it would be getting light soon so I had to get inside somewhere. I looked around I saw a bakery (that of course wasn’t open) and a clothes shop…I looked at my watch, five thirty”. Also, if the narrator is aware of sunrise times, why is s/he so off? “five thirty. I only had half an hour it till it would be light…The sunlight came at twenty past six.”

  14. QUESTION:
    How do the Abkhasians regard work?
    Please read the following and help me i didnt get any of it.:

    It is not unusual for the people of the Caucasus region of the former Soviet Union to live well into their 90s and 100s. Estimates suggest that almost 3 percent of the population of the Caucasus is over 90 years of age. In contrast, people over 90 in the United States represent only 0.4 percent of the population. Not only do Caucasians live to a very old age, their physical and mental faculties remain remarkably intact. These people show the signs of aging—their hair is gray or white, and their skin in wrinkled—but they have good eyesight, excellent hearing, and unusually erect posture.
    Intrigued by the question of why the Caucasians live such long and healthy lives, American anthropologist Sula Benet undertook a study of the elderly people of Abkhasia. Abkhasia is a former Soviet republic bordered on the west by the Black Sea and on the east by the Caucasus Mountains. Benet’s findings led her to suggest that the stability and continuity of the Abkhasians’ culture is the major factor responsible for the Caucasians’ long life expectancies. Below is a summary of her findings.
    Benet found that the Abkhasians regard work as an activity vital to life and that the concept of retirement is completely foreign to them. From their early years to their old age, they work as hard as their ability and physical conditions allow. Obviously, as they grow older the amount of work they can do decreases. Even so, people in their 100s continue to work, often as much as four hours a day.
    The Abkhasians also find time for exercise. An Abkhasian saying states that “it is better to move without purpose than to sit still.” Consequently, Abkhasians usually begin each day by taking a long walk. They believe that these work and exercise habits greatly contribute to their long lives. Their doctors tend to agree with the Abkhasians, suggesting that the Abkhasians’ slow, steady approach to work and their dedication to exercise help their bodies to operate more efficiently.
    The Abkhasians believe that their diet also is a factor in their long lives. They never overeat, and they consider overweight people to be ill. When eating, they cut their food into small bites, which they chew very slowly. This habit greatly helps their digestion. Also, the type of food the Abkhasians eat varies little throughout their lives. They consume little meat and practically no fish. Most of their protein comes from goat cheese and buttermilk. They never use sugar, although they do use honey as a sweetener. The bulk of their diet comes in the form of fresh fruits and vegetables and a bread substitute called abista.
    Few Abkhasians smoke, and they do not drink tea or coffee. The only stimulant the Abkhasians use is a locally-produced red wine, which is low in alcoholic content. This wine is consumed usually in moderate amounts, at the midday and evening meals. Doctors interviewed by Benet believe strongly that the Abkhasians’ sensible diet and lack of “bad habits” add years to their lives.
    Benet acknowledges that work, exercise, and diet all contribute to the Abkhasians’ long life span. She argues, however that the Abkhasians’ attitude toward aging is of equal importance. Benet notes that the Abkhasians’ language contains no words that are equivalent to the English words retired, senior citizen, or old people. Rather, Abkhasians over the age of 100 are called long-living people. Also, death for the Abkhasians is not the logical end to life’s journey, but rather, something irrational. When death finally does come, the Abkhasians show their grief openly, often uncontrollably.
    Further, Benet suggests, the structure of Abkhasian society and the role of the elderly in it also contribute to long lives. Abkhasian society is based on a complex kinship system. This system is so extensive that everyone with the same surname is considered kin. Such interdependence is the basis of the strong sense of security and belonging that most Abkhasians—both young and old—possess. This sense of security and belonging is strengthened for older Abkhasian by the respect they receive. They are asked to lead major ceremonies and celebrations, are called on to settle disputes, and are consulted on all matters of importance.
    In short, Benet found that the elderly of Abkhasia are life-loving, balanced people who believe that they are an important part of society. This, she notes, is in stark contrast to many older Americans who believe that they are burdens to themselves and to their families. Could such people—and all Americans—learn something from the Abkhasians? According to Benet, the answer is yes.
    1)How do the Abkhasians regard work?
    2)How does the way the older Abkhasians regard themselves compare to the way many older Americans are portrayed in the mass media?
    PLEASE HELP SOON!

    • ANSWER:
      1) work is generally viewed as necessary for sustained life. It is necessary to produce the resources for life.

      2) Older americans are generally portrayed as nursing home residents, or retired with money and all the comforts of life. They are the lucky ones, who planned for the later years and have the resources to retire. Many retirees have learned the value of some sort of physical activity, such as volunteering with hospitals and charitable organizations. Many believe that to become inactive, is to invite an earlier death. And then there are those of us who are still gainfully employed. I am 74, and have two jobs. It not only provides money for things we need but it keeps me out of the house, where the wife would probably end my existence as she tried to deal with the unfortunate ways of an old man. God Bless.


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